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| simpleplan13 2007-12-28 ch 1,  | abuseinteresting piece... some of the descriptions are odd, but realyl great.. the war baby shower thing and shrapnel into confetti... great piece... definitely makes you think and is very unique.. thanks for your review |
| 123454321 2007-12-28 ch 1, | abuse"Passing dogma around with the queso and wings" Favorite line. Your imagery is truly impressive. The flow is good, but your use of simple and complex words intermitantly... wow. One cliche that is a personal tick, "see how far down the rabbit hole goes". But I can't think of anything to replace it with. -J.A. |