Very nice story. The poem really made the story alot more scary ^_^. I felt the ending was a little rushed but its a good horror story :)

Jeez, I thought this was going to be a crackfic that was more funny than scary, but that poem gave me shivers. If you made this a little longer with some more details you could turn it into a great novella.

It was a pretty good story. I think it developed a little too quickly. You should add more description and emotion.