It's cute, it's promising, and it's easy to read aloud to the people around me.

While your diction is good, I had one slight issue reading chapter 2. The use of the word celerity. Your grammar and syntax reads at about the same grade level, but using the word celerity sticks out like a sore thumb. It gives the story the feeling that you had learned that word recently and decided on throwing it in to the rest of the story.

Keep up the promising work.

...'as an unspoken rules'...singular?

Apart from that, there's nothing, really. Nice bits of humour, and nice start!