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| Frail.Wings.Of.Vanity. 2008-05-30 ch 1,  | abusei love how you can write so freely on awkward subjects that everyone secretly wonders about, thinks about, envisions. Its sort of beautiful. Its very beautiful. It creates an an image that all of us dread to see but have to realize at one point. 415...wasnt it? All poems? It makes me even more envious of your lovely words. |
| theapathycrusade 2008-05-28 ch 1, | abuseExcellent. You've got a hell of a lot of talent. "where a mother coos to her duet of lost daughters." Great |
| Comawhite13 2008-04-10 ch 1, | abuseI was apprehensive to read this piece when I saw the title of it, but I think it's rather good. You write poetry rather well. Good job! |
| Anthelia White 2008-04-03 ch 1, | abuseI can't think of anything to say, its such a good piece. You win at poetry. |
| Midnight Doorman 2008-03-11 ch 1, | abuseOverall, I think it's a well written poem... though I agree with the reviewer above that one wouldn't kiss someone's collar bone while the other is "cresting." I guess I just can't really picture how that would actually work. Do you really think that the guy was that cold to her, though? Some young men do really fall in love, you know. |
| SweetWithUncertainty 2008-03-06 ch 1, | abusebravo |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abuseI just love the way you phrase things; "swollen blond," "boldly silent twin," "church-cocked boyfriend." The adjectives you use are unexpected, and that's what makes it fantastic. And I totally agree with you on the subject matter, too. Great poem. Keep writing! :) |
| Ayx 2008-01-22 ch 1, | abusean infant sucking from its mothers infancy. Wow...I absolutely fell in love with that line. The whole piece was great but this line was killer for me. Great work Ayx |
| Time Ticks Backwards 2008-01-21 ch 1, | abusethat last stanza was just awesome! |
| Artfish 2008-01-20 ch 1, | abuseBrilliant, especially in the very last stanza. Very brilliant work. |
| randompoetry 2008-01-16 ch 1, | abusei must say that i found this brilliant. especially at the end. |
| .mate.feed.kill.repeat. 2008-01-04 ch 1, | abuseThis is an interesting look at what is in the media. I like the way you wrote it that it could relate to a lot of people, but you focused it at two people that anyone could know. Very cool. -stix- |
| garrulous-mime 2008-01-04 ch 1, | abuseInsightful though explicit. Excellent work. |
| Coke and Milk 2008-01-04 ch 1, | abuseI was sad when I heard Jamie Lynn was impregnated. Not for her, but for her millions of tweenybopper fans. I cannot imagine the chance that baby will have in life, because not only is it born to a child itself, but it is also born into the blackworld of fame. On the subject of this poem, it was beautiful. I love the term 'she uses pink words'. |
| stupidxx 2008-01-03 ch 1, | abusethis is amazing. i am honestly going to send all my friends the link to this. great work. keep it up... get this published... please! R/R |