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| The Postscript 2007-12-29 ch 1,  | abuseGreat! There are just a few typos in here - "I gritted my teeth" instead of "greeted"? "Let this knife now prick a drop of my blood"? I think the semicolon isn't needed and it flows smoother and is less disruptive if you just go without. I absolutely LOVE the last stanza. How powerful! Nice work - keep writing, k. |