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| SeaOfCrimson 2008-05-28 ch 7,  | abuseYAY! ONO-SAN! (Does happy dance) You put Ono-san in this chapter! And not only that, but Hamada-san too! It was beautiful! Jacob: Your a little to crazed about this story... Me: AH! Jacob-kun, what are you doing here?! This is my review! Jacob: I was bored. Me: Well, leave before I make you! Jacob: Just so you know, you're still grounded. (Gets up to leave) Me:*Frantic* O-oh, Jacob-kun!! You want something to drink? Jacob: I knew that would work. Me: There's still one thing...DON'T INSULT DYINGSHINIGAMI11! She is a genius. Unlike you, Mr. I-Haven't-Written-A-Story-In-2-Years. Jacob: Just review already...I swear we aren't related... Me: It was awsome!! I wish i could read it over again, but I'm grounded. Which sucks! I'll try to keep reviewing under this new law so UPDATE!! (I'm watching you!) Jacob: Please tell me that i'm not the only one who thinks SOC is crazy. Because she is. That's sisters for you. Me: I heard that, teme! |
| Melissa Norvell 2008-05-11 ch 6, | abuseThis was a short chapter but a good one. I really like the characterization here. Good luck with your next update! |
| SeaOfCrimson 2008-04-30 ch 6, | abuseYosh! Karin is now offically my third favorite character! (right behind Ono-san and Hamada/Minami which ever you prefer.) I'm still shakey on my feelings toward Kazuya, but i still like how he was developed! I have no errors to say to you since you fixed the whole speaking problem. Keep it up! Sorry it is a short review, but i'm tired right now. Just so you know you are wickedly awsome so keep updating. UPDATE! |
| Eun Ai Hoshi 2008-04-29 ch 6, | abuseGreat job! You don't go into too much detail but you put in enough for the reader to feel satisfied. Love that! Please continue and update soon! |
| Melissa Norvell 2008-04-27 ch 5, | abuseAnother great chapter! Keep up the good work! |
| SeaOfCrimson 2008-04-21 ch 5, | abuseYAY! Ono-san was in this chapter! WAHOO! I also think i'm starting to like Karin, but i'm still unsure of my feelings toward her. Though, i like Hamada, he's awsome! Kazuya is still undecided, but he does have a well developed personality. You clarified the speaking, i'm so happy! (I can now understand who is talking!) Even if i can't write a happy ending, you made me happy by updating! (Does happy dance) Keep writting! This story is amazing! UPDATE! |
| SeaOfCrimson 2008-04-05 ch 4, | abuse*Tear* Sad...So sad...I think i'm going to cry...*Crys in small corner of woe*(Yes! I have a corner of woe!) Okay...I'm better now. It is official! My favorite character is Ono-san. I just like the whole mystery about her. At least to me she is mysterious... Great chapter, though might I add, sometimes it is hard to tell who is talking. Maybe you should clarify a little more. But everything else is perfect! Keep at it and UPDATE!! |
| Melissa Norvell 2008-03-31 ch 4, | abuseAvery cute chapter. Keep up the good work! |
| SeaOfCrimson 2008-03-25 ch 3, | abuseInteresting...I'm kinda of hooked now I really like Ono-san! Sounds like one of my characters! I look forward to future chapters! |
| Melissa Norvell 2008-01-06 ch 2, | abuseThis was an intersting piece. I'm actually rather fond of your works. I'll definitely be around next chapter. |
| badamm 2008-01-05 ch 2, | abuseSO I am a little confused, isn't Azuma and Karin the same person and The Raven is not listed in the characters, but could be Saotome, Jirou. Your answer to this would be greatly appreciated. A/n: I liked the fast paced intro aspect, that is always inviting to me. Yes a couple of characters and a whole boat of troubles raining down immediately helps to be very captivating. Stuff the reevaluate: statements like after "his cell phone rang" and he [Raven] says "Boss is that You??' is excessive, afterall, if he is on a mission to oersee and save this girl, would he be carrying a phone that had all of his people to be able to call him? |
| badamm 2008-01-05 ch 1, | abuseOk I will await the Fate of all these new characters |
| MistyRose14 2007-12-29 ch 1, | abusecool...it looks interesting! i hope you can post it soon! |