 Penmaster17 2008-01-13 . chapter 2I like this a lot better than chapter one. I'm a little confused about whats going on, however. Is their any real underlining plot or themes too this story? besides that I liked it.
Just a few nit-pickings:
1. Madruin walked deeper, deeper into where?
2. knocking unconscious the rest, this should be written knocking the rest of unconscious. |