I like this a lot better than chapter one. I'm a little confused about whats going on, however. Is their any real underlining plot or themes too this story? besides that I liked it.

Just a few nit-pickings:

1. Madruin walked deeper, deeper into where?

2. knocking unconscious the rest, this should be written knocking the rest of unconscious.

I rather enjoyed. Imagery is stunning! although I think further description of the monsters would be a great improvement. The flow needs some help and it didn't make sense near end, it was still good. Awesome work!