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| Coralollie 2008-07-12 ch 1,  | abusethree short lines of truth and beaty i love it! |
| pendisciple 2008-06-05 ch 1, | abuseNice haiku. I like how it's straight to the point. Along with the title, it gives a very clear image of what you're trying to say. I also enjoyed the 'Red Ribbon' analogy. Good poem. |
| Water Archer Princess 2008-05-27 ch 1, | abuseI loved this... I'm a firm believer of the sacredness of sex and marriage, so I can really relate to this haiku. Nice. ü |
| canoo 2008-05-23 ch 1, | abusei love it! and i agree with the person who wants to put it on a t-shirt, it's so rare for anyone to want that in their life anymore. people think it's like a disease to keep yourself chase until the very right one comes along. but it's not, it's just a great way to maintain purity and prevent the brokenhearts that come with giving one's self up too soon. :D |
| fatbird33 2008-05-11 ch 1, | abusegood for you! * |
| Peanuts Factory 2008-05-01 ch 1, | abuseCute:) |
| dragonflydreamer 2008-04-19 ch 1, | abuseReviewing for the Review Game's Review Marathon! (link in profile) This is amazing! I don't think I could possibly say anything in this review that could truely do this justice. You said so much in such a simple way. Working with the predefined 17 words, you picked some extremely powerful ones. I loved this so much! |
| PheonixLament 2008-04-17 ch 1, | abuseI want to print this and put it on a shirt, so the whole world can see. Very very very well said. You're rare. We're rare, but I'm so glad we exist. Not many people can hold a vow like this, I'm glad we can. |
| Purpose 2008-04-08 ch 1, | abuseIt's so hard to keep your chasity, that just means you have to be stronger. I've always been a fan of haikus, sweet and simple and strait to the point (the Japenese got something right there that and samurai swords). |
| Child'sHope 2008-04-06 ch 1, | abuseWow. That's excellent. Sometimes simplicity is best, and you've managed to get the point across beautifully in a few words. If anything could be perfect, this would easily be. |
| Thoughtful Silence 2008-04-06 ch 1, | abuseWhoa, this was beautifully done- very honest and powerful, made more so by the confines of the haiku intensifying each of your words. Good job. -Silence |
| Thermite 2008-04-03 ch 1, | abuseIt's very simple and honest. Honesty is hard to come by these days. Very cute, if a haiku could be considered cute. I shall check out your other writings. Cheers! |
| Dreaming Chica 2008-03-29 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful! Your words are simple but so effective! Always stay true to your self! ♥ Dreaming Chica ♥ |
| electric feel 2008-03-28 ch 1, | abusewriting about your belief in abstinence could quickly become long, condescending and opinionated. putting it simply in a haiku was the perfect choice. |
| Arcane-Fox 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuseThis seemed very meaningful and well done, I liked it, By the way, thanks for the review. |