Oh you so need to update! I love this story so far. Lol and you know what? You main character, Devon, had my same name lol well except for the last name though. Haha well anyway just had to put that out there, thought it was kinda funny. Well, please update soon. Great work!

This is really good! i cant wait to read more!

I'm now a beta reader. So if you're still interested in having me as your beta for this story, please contact me. Thank you. Hope your doing well. Have a wonderful day/night.

Sincerely,

Alina @};-

Please tell me this isn't finished... It's so intriguing... Once I started reading it I couldn't stop... It still has a lot to clear up... Please reply or update faster...

Please and Thank You


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I'm hooked. Basic story done in short. Devon's a pearl, I find her character very attractive and very unique, it's not like those other girl characters where they all have one-side personlity where it's being exploited in the wrong fashion. But there's a few things that pokes the rims of my mind - how did Devon get her name? Did she legally change it? Or did her parents give it to her? If so, then were they high or drunk when they wrote down her name on the birth certificate? What about her sister? Has she ever tried to contact Devon? Has she ever tried to get money out of her? Or was she plain-out embarrassed and ashamed to have a gay sister that she severed all ties with Devon?

And what about Absinthe (by the way, how do you pronounceher name?)? Is her personal story going to raked out in further chapters piece by pieceor is it going to come all at once? (Well, I shouldn't be asking that question - xD)

Your story is simply captivating and the storyline is so mature and well thought out unlike other FxF slashes (but you've already stated that in one of your author notes, so there's no need to bring it up :P) It's just a very good plot and I'm intrigued to find out what happens next and if there's going to be some ** that's going to mess up the storyling just a little bit.

[Sorry if I have too many questions]

I'll cheer you on while you write this story and I'm devastatingly happy that I happened to stumble upon your story. It really is a ruby out of a box of diamonds.

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funny... keep riting i wanna kno wat happens next

okay...so whats going on? its been 20 days, more than 2 weeks and i have yet to read another chapter of this lovely story. hopefully your okay and all. upate! as soon as you can. leaving me in a cliff hanger position sucks. lol. thanks and have a wonderful day.

Sincerely,

Alina @};-

i love this story. i really hope you continue cause i am so looking forward to how things go out for your characters. brilliant fic. :)

I'm fascinated with the way you use dialogue between characters. The words reveal more about them but at the same time, aren't necessarily making it obvious.

I would've liked it though, if you created a stronger setting for Paris. For example, if Devon's been to Paris before, there could be some sort of reflection on the place. Has it changed? Is it still the same? If she hasn't, then what strikes her about the destination?

It'd help change/build the atmoshpere of the Parisian scene and certainly make it feel more "real" that Devon has left her home to visit a foreign destination. However, you could argue that since she's going for work, it doesn't really make a difference to her.

Either way, that was enjoyable chapter. Thanks for the update!

Ah.. Absinthe and her ways. Brownie points for Devon for resisting sex-crazed models. Mm.. When I read "..my cheeks boiled in excitement." I couldn't help, but think of boils and that kind of freaked me out. Yeah, I'm a tad strange.

Great storyline and interesting characters. I like that it's not being rushed and rather a love story. Keep it up.

Oh... I'm gradually beginning to understand Absinthe more as a character. She's an enigma herself although in this chapter she really appears more like a simpler...

Thanks for another update (and a fast one XD), as always, I hope to read and review again soon!

Its a good chapter...there probably was one spelling mistake in there that I caught, can't really say what it is now. I loved how she practically kicked everyone else's ** with the canon camera. =) it was totally cool. This was one of my many favorite lines in this chapter:

“Damn mate, I think I just broke your nose!” I yelled. “Did I?”

He covered his nose for a second and turned to glare at me. He stood up, raging like a bull, trying to bring me down for sure, but I didn’t hesitate at hitting him again with my partner in crime I will refer to as Canon.

“Oh, now I did break your nose” I told him.


Okay, so it's more than one of my favorite sentences in there. lol. The whole fighting scene was good. I enjoyed it very much. Made me laugh a lil bit too. Update soon...thanks and have a wonderful day.

Sincerely,

Alina @};-

I personally think the slow to sex approach is necessary in girl on girl writing. Not that I don't enjoy reading the lovely sexing exploits of two other females, but something about the pure lust unrealistically emotionally detached factor of how most writers write it makes the characters seem, flat, not as vibrant.I'm quite enjoying the way this story is going and shall soon go on to read the other chapters.

Thank you for another update! XD I loved the fighting scene... haha... getting owned by a woman with a Canon camera... that's really gotta hurt your pride.

See you next time!