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| Tytherpol 2008-01-02 ch 1, | abuseIt is honest. i admire the piece, actually. i don't relate or like it much, but i love the style and the urgency and the playful ironies you twisted your words to create. much like the book i read this morning, The Awakening, actually. i hated /hated/ the book. worst book i probably have ever read. but i loved parts of it. the parts where the characters seemed real enough for their bodies to come out of the ink letters (even though i hated the characters, too). but it is much like this poem because what the author gave to it really strengthened it and gave it a base that at least let the reader know that "hey. this is what you got. work through it because it actually has some pretty neat meanings, & ps u ain't all the great yourself oh-mighty-reader." you have some really neat ideas here. i like the bluntness of that little title of oxymoron-ic-ness-? :/ . actually, i probably love it. and i love what is behind your twisting of images. it's neat. "glows realizing her God was more than star dust and doctrines frightened" and pretty. -ty. |
| Pixie in a Birdcage 2008-01-02 ch 1, | abuseBrilliantly done! I adore the religious imagery, especially the reference to the noses as devil horns and to the Bible as "her god." And the first line is definitly my favorite: "He kissed her religiously." Lovely job. |
| James E. Clerk 2007-12-30 ch 1, | abuseHaving been in a similar relationship, I can understand the inner struggle that she is facing... I love how you make the references and illusions to the devil and Christ... Great job. |