Reviews for The Idiot Factory

FellowMan 2007-12-30 ch 1,	abuseAlright--its ok--but I feel it could use more heaviness, or lilting, or some sort of flow--yes I get it; assonance, alliteration yada-yada--but most readers will get this; they'll go 'hum nifty' but thats it where it'll end; we get most of that in main stream media everyday. But what a poet wants to do is slip it under there nose, not bOp them in the nose with it (well sometimes that can work too)--the wording needs to free up and debacle the readers mind to a point where it can fully embrace the imagery you desire to place before it.
alicer 2007-12-30 ch 1,	abuseI agree with the other person except I don't like the repetition all too much (although it did flow nicely and totally reads like a song). I mean, it was well written but I think maybe it may just not be my taste.
Julius Gillian 2007-12-30 ch 1,	abuseI enjoyed the repetition which pointed back to the main concept, but it could've been better. There could've been more meat, meaning I'd like to understand why you think these people are 'stupid, or belong in the looney been.' Elaborate, tell me how you feel, express how they might feel. Also, format reads like a story. Try changing that around. Satisfactory at least, keep writing :)