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| Hed in the Cloudz 2008-02-18 ch 1,   | It's a bit short and uneventful, but I like it the most of what I've read by you. Just the idea of cheesecake flavored hersheys kisses...My only advice(s) would be to make it longer and to merge her long space-less phrase into something unpronounceable (like Harry Potter-- wanngobawime for want to go to the ball with me). These things seem like they'd give it more plot-- because we know her feelings, but not her motivations, etc etc. Sorry for the short, incomprehensible review-- not much time to type. But thanks for replying! |
| LiME-GREEN-CAPES 2008-01-01 ch 1, | adorable :) |
| twinklee 2007-12-30 ch 1, | Aww! that's so cute and that really relates to something happening to me...weird. haha...really weird because my junior is in orchestra too...haha not really anything to do with the story, but nice creativity! :] |
| Cupid's Jinx 2007-12-30 ch 1, | m...those Hershey's Kisses are delishious! Short 'n' sweet! XD Laurie -x- |
| Marisa Gittinger 2007-12-30 ch 1, | YAY! OMG YAY! SO GOOD! |
| 999FloatingFatCats 2007-12-30 ch 1, | OH MY GOD! Your story is just too cute. I absolutely love it. :) |