What I enjoyed about this piece is that you broke it down in ways where I paid attention to the words. Like 'me' 'forever' and such, big words that demand alot of attention but just seem more special when seperated from the sentence.

The thing I didn't like was that this poem is repetitive and somewhat bland in its description. "it's okay" and "it's okay" seem very mundane to me, and you mention it for a while. It's wasteful to the poem because one liners, especially one liners, should say something to capture attention or imply something the poem has been saying or will be concluding. It just makes it a little stale when you have 'hi-bye' characters in it.

Apart from that, I like how you choosed to seperate certain words, that's very important.

Keep writing!