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| Peanuts Factory 2008-04-14 ch 1,  | abuseA desperate sense of hope... that's what I felt when I read this. Very nice. I'll be reading more of your poems. |
| Billie.Joelle 2008-01-15 ch 1, | abuseWow. Very nice. I really like all the emotion and the... reality of this poem. Its very descriptive. I like it! Keep writing! |
| simpleplan13 2008-01-14 ch 1, | abuseI LOVE that ending line.. the idea of it is so great and I feel that way sometimes.. the rest of the piece is great as well |
| Moondog Dozier 2008-01-07 ch 1, | abuseI like the specific emotion of this. It's honest, and open, which draws the reader into an attachment with the words. Well developed. Good write. |
| -insertsomethinguniquehere- 2008-01-06 ch 1, | abuseI think you should make "The weight is too much I’m living a lie" into 2 lines; split it between "much" and "I'm" Same with "My eyes are open I just can’t see" between "open" and "I". Great poem. Well written, and captures the feeling. :) |
| ButterBatz 2008-01-05 ch 1, | abuseBreathtaking. i often dont know how to express myself. You just did it for me. Marvelous. |
| kloun mannequin 2008-01-04 ch 1, | abuseit's a deep stuff that makes me think |
| Prisoner of Dreams 2008-01-02 ch 1, | abuseI like the concept of "buried alive"... interesting. The last line does a great job of tieing it all together... good job! ^^ |
| Princess-anna57 2007-12-30 ch 1, | abuseWell constructed and it flows well. Excellent! Keep writing. ~Anna~ ^_^ |
| MoonlightSnow 2007-12-30 ch 1, | abuseI liked it towards the ending, especially the last two lines. Nice work. ~Yuki-chan A.K.A. MoonlightSnow |