Holy Crap! I don't know when you put this up (though I'm sure it was a long time ago), but when I read it I was like awe. Now I feel so guility for abadoning My Pants. I love you, Ali. (in a non-creepy girl I met online kind of way) And I am going to try my hardest to come back to my pants. (because a life is seriously overrated)

This poem is so adorable. The sentiment behind it is great. Terrific work.

~Twilight Starr~

Ali--

I LOVED this poem! It was totally awesome; and you mentioned ME! Haha. The end of this, the line "I'll always have the memories" was really, really great. Thumbs up! And I've really got to check out your writing, more. There's some good stuff :D

-Amber

I can see this is like a tribute to your friends. Very nice.

But I think this reads more like a story than a poem, and it feels like you just broke down sentences into two-liners to achieve some kind of effect with additional questions.

My advice would be to beef it up withmore adjective, or take the people you want to describe and put in words that make the most sense about that person. If there are too many describe them as a whole. There's alot you can do to let the reader be captured by the memory.

I'm glad you had this kind of experience though, friendship is invaluable.

Keep writing.