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| 1Wanderer 2008-01-26 ch 1,  | abuseA very interesting poem... as a child brought up in a Hindu household I'm quite fascinated if unsure of how to interpret the poem. :) Good job. |
| Kusje 2008-01-08 ch 1, | abuse'blades of tinted eyes' is a very strong verse. This haiku was interesting for me to make out but I really enjoyed it. |
| Julius Gillian 2007-12-31 ch 1, | abuseThe first line makes me think of the underlying beliefs we never tell other people because it's forbidden. If we ever let out these secrets then we'd be at a great disadvantage. On the other hand it gives me the impression of how two faced people can be, where they look in contempt at one person and passionately at another without realizing they have the same spirit, emotions, and such that everyone does. The judging eye. The second line screams 'envy' to me. Not sure what a glade is. Water mutation sounds scientific. But it reminds me of natural selection, and it seems to fit the way society works. When one trend everyone is envious to guzzle down isn't great anymore, they run for the next. The old one is substituted by the new trend by natural selection. This is just my opinion, this was excellently composed. I should read more of your stuff, I've already read a few. |
| Tytherpol 2007-12-31 ch 1, | abuseyes. wowowowowow incredible. have you ever heard sage francis' song "jesus in a bowl of germs" |