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| Yellow Duvet 2008-01-13 ch 1, | abuseWow ... this was so romantic and amazing. So nice, great job! |
| the lost yarn spinner 2008-01-07 ch 1, | abuseThis is beautiful! I love how you compare the universe to the person. The emotion is palpable. I'm sitting here trying to pick a favorite line(s), but I can't! I love it! |
| A Distant Planet 2008-01-01 ch 1, | abuseThis is absolutely amazing, I love this. You've got a real talent, it's brilliant. |
| fairytale failure 2007-12-31 ch 1, | abuseI love this...how you tied in love and outer space was beautiful. Your images, as well as poetic devices, let the reader know both what you are seeing and feeling. My favourite stanza was about the fifth, about how 'The universe sways as you stand', and I also really liked the ending (you said star-struck, but somehow I was also thinking love-struck.) In the third stanza, I loved your simile 'credits fell like constellations' but I didn't understand what the rest of it meant. |
| it's june 2007-12-31 ch 1, | abuseI really really like how you made references to astronomy. They didn't sound like they were deliberately stuffed into the poem, but they made the poem unique. I found the last line very effective. It connected your two themes of astronomy and love together succinctly and smoothly. Connections are good. |