Reviews for Falling Off the Edge of Techno

Ann Gry 2008-04-25 ch 1,	abuseWhat a tough lesson. I liked the way you wrote the interaction between the girl and the boss. The helplessness of the situation was palpable. There is some change in tense at the beginning of the story from past to present, but other than that I was more interested in what was happening.
Written 2008-04-09 ch 1,	abuseouch! this was certainly a bitter piece, but I enjoyed it. sometimes that's how life goes. there seems to be some minor misuse of punctuation, but it's nothing too distracting. my suggestion would just be to keep a beta around to catch the nit picky things. well done! ps great title :)
Taltush/MeiMei 2008-01-01 ch 1,	abuseAn interesting piece. I agree - this has a touch of bitterness to it. There are a few comma mistakes throughout the piece (having too many, for example. I mean, in one sentence. At the end of a quote you'll have a comma, but you'll end the quote and then continue it through the comma. That's incorrect, but minor), but they're not all that common, nor important. The beginning, with the "Have fun girlie" is unbelievable. I mean that literally. It's quite silly and out-of-place. All in all, this read is certainly interesting. A curious topic and pretty good writing means that this piece is not bad - even good. Correcting the few mistakes would really make this shine. Nice job.