|Reviews for Deceased|
| Thenardier 7/9/08 . chapter 1
It's sad, yet enchantingly beautiful at the same time. The sense of finality here is overwhelming, and the choice of words, especially the italicizing of forgotten is impeccable, making this a wonderful read.
| Chidori Nadare 1/8/08 . chapter 1
I love the last line and how you italicized forgotten. (memoirs, ...forgotten). It's somehow very personal to an extent. Great job.
P.S It's been a while...I'm going to review more later but life's incredibly busy.
| Basara 1/5/08 . chapter 1
both of your works relate into something personal... with the dead... this one describes the breakage of mortal dust from it's inner container...
| tearing hands 1/2/08 . chapter 1
Beautifully sad haiku. I really liked "memoirs" in the last line, and the italicized "forgotten," like the word itself is fading away.
| xDancingintheRainx 1/2/08 . chapter 1
I really love the formatting you used here. It definitely adds to the piece positively. Your word choice is awesome, too. Simple, but it holds so much intensity. Very well done.
| Julius Gillian 1/2/08 . chapter 1
A very straightforward haiku.
What I admire about this poem is its intricate detail of its words. In other words, the haiku demands that I pay attention closely to it. Burn followed by a comma, away followed by a hyphen, and so on. It gives the reader a chance to filter in their own perception of the 'deceased'.