This is essentially a comic book in novel form. I don't know if that's a compliment to you. It's well written and entertaining enough, but I'm not sure if I like the comic book-ish style thing.

Interesting. It's amazing how much the stuff you write when you're younger reflects the type of person you grow up to me, aye? Also, think about clearing some stuff out. If they're in an american school with GPAs and stuff, they shouldn't have names like 'Foo', 'Tan', 'Wong' and 'Ho'. One or two are okay, but practically everyone has a Singaporean surname. And think about whether you want to use local Singaporean terms like 'hongbaos'. A fair bit of editing to do, but once you clear that, it should be fine. Nicely done. It's very... Fluid. And you have a clear view of where you want the story to go.

I really enjoyed your work. I wish you had continued the story and not ended it when you did. I really wanted to see how the group deals with the aliens!

In your notes you mentioned some issues with responses you got with this and I'm sorry to hear that. It's always hard to have people unappreciative toward your work. Please don't let this stop you from writing. I think you have a lot of talent and really would have loved to see how you continued this story. To me, it doesn't have a clear ending and I do feel the relationship with Clarissa, Ren and Angeline was confusing toward the end, but I feel your idea was very good and your story has a lot of potential. The characters and their abilities was very unique and well written. Overall, with every chapter I wanted to read more.

Keep up the good work and I hope to be able to read more about your characters in the future!

awesome

Okay, I like the story but I am sometimes confused on what is going on. BUT I am still reading so that's good!

o this is really good this is only the first chapter and i am pulled into it gosh cant wait until the next chapter man. GOOD WORK!

oh oh oh let me guess who the night phantom is lol i think its ren ho lol but i think we all know that and i think ur stiry is just soo cute i hope u will write many more storys later



love kiggy

yeesh, dun announce that im ur schoolmate lulu!!

and u said u updated, but all i see are your comments!

love this story. i'm gonna finish reading tomorrowXD

im liking the story :)
and Ren :D

I like the stort however the ending not a lot. && you're a guy? i burst out laughing. sorry, it was weird. i fugured girl and you may heard this already but a guy?

Nice to see some guys do some of this,

well story is good and i enjoyed reading it. &&please tell me that's not the ending? =[

Very good so far, can't wait to see how further chapters turn out.

can u just continue updating alr?

I really like this story. I just started reading it and well fell in love with it. Psh. I stayed up for like 2 full days reading your story. Tis exciting. Tho I wish there was more of a thing going on between Ren and Clarissa. You are an amazing writer. I love it. I'm sorry to hear things in you're life are all well... BLAH. That really sucks. Well I hope you continue writing stories. :)
Best of Luck.

Aww. That sucks that your not going to updating anymore for this story. I liked it. It was funny. :(