wow. that was amazing. I feel like I've just read a real, published novel. everything was awesome. the characters were rich and real, the story had twists and turns...wow. thank you very, very much for sharing. that was totally awesome. you rock.

I now know what Rachelle looks like after reading chapter four. I apologize for my confusion. It's that there wasn't any physical description of her when she was first introduced (correct me if I'm wrong.)

Well, I've managed to have enough time to read two more chapters. This is just amazing. I wish I could offer you any constructive criticism, but to be honest so far, I feel like reading a very well written published novel. It's one of the most honest stories on this site. I admire how you handle issues. To me, it wasn't over the top or sugarcoated. I even like how you potrayed Liberty's mother and brother. They were just like real white supremacists, and even though I disgree with their views, to me they're a brutally honest portrayal.

I just finished reading the first three chapters of this, and I got to say that I'm impressed. Your writing style is beautiful (it flows well) and I believe I can't even spot a grammatical error/typo (and I can easily find them when reading! XD ). I've heard of white supremacists and learned about them in a class I'm taking. How you portrayed it, especially in the main character's point of view, was realistic.

The only thing was that there wasn't much necessary details about Rachelle (her appearance.) I'm not sure if that's intentional to let the readers infer what she looks like with the description about her voice. Correct me if I'm wrong.

I noticed that you switched from present to past tense. I figured that it could be intentional, but the switch was confusing to me.

Overall, great job so far and I'll definitely read the rest when I get the chance. :-)

This is such a beautiful, moving story. It really hit me in the chest, and I can't help but marvel at it. Thank you for posting this, and I hope you keep writing. I'm going to go look at your other work, now.
But yes, what a powerful piece. I hope this gets published and handed out and that everyone gets a chance to read it; it's unassuming, not preaching and might actually make a difference.
As a mixed-race Bi girl, I'd never seen it from 'the other side', but I'll tell you what, it certainly opened my eyes a bit.
Thank you.

This is maybe the best story I've ever read on FictionPress. You're an amazing author. :):):)

The End?! What do you mean, the end?

Brilliant. Totally loved the characters, and the whole story itself, though the sap in me would have enjoyed a little bit of resolution, romance-wise.

Anyway, like I said, brilliant.

Impressively, I feel that this ending lived up to the greatness taht is the reast of the story. This really is one of my favourite fp stories.

Are you planning on writing a sequel or a companion piece?

I simply loved this story. Kinda sad to see that it's over though :( Oh well... Great job!

E-end? D: Oh no, I wasn't expecting it to be over! I want to read more! And yet, this is such a good ending. Ohboy. Ohman. T_T Okay, accepting now. -sniff- Wriite more! This was beautiful.

Hello.
I really hope you update this story. Probably the best I've read on FP.
I will beg, bribe, blackmail, curse... anything to get an update! c:

Well done! I am really looking forward to when this is done, really cant wait! I usually dont like romance stories that end badly but the plot was so well done that I really didnt even notice. So once again great story!

I loved everything about this story I think, it drew me in and I just could not stop reading it - so here I am at 4am still up!

You take a really, really difficult issue - one fraught with political, moral, religious aspects - and weave it into an interesting, mind-blowingly awesome narrative.

The characters are all interesting, and they interact in ways that make sense. The drama and conflict is masterfully handled, so the pace of the story is neither too fast nor too slow.

I think my favourite thing is Libby's development - her coming into her own, both as a woman and a singer. She has so much going on in her life, but she handles it, and you show, through the techniques she uses - her breathing - that it's not effortless, she's human too and she has to do things that are hard for her.

I was totally shocked, but not shocked by her brothers involvement - I had foreseen that Max had a personal stake in the case, but not Donner.

Basically now I think I am going to wonder how this story ends, since it kept me so enthralled for 50 chapters. You have an amazing skill for weaving narrative, and creating vivid characters that leap off the page - I feel like I'm reading a biography about real people, even though I know it's fiction, because your plot and characters are so well rounded. Please, continue this. I'm adding it to my favourites.

Oh, heck. Cliff-hanger. Can't be mad at you because you wrote such a good story but still. Heck.

Hi, again! I loved the conversation between Libby and her mother, the tight, cold bitterness, the way some things never change. I'm so glad she didn't back down or apologize.

And the symbolism of her new garden. How it was a reward she felt she didn't deserve, because Donner'd been arrested; I also love, "I breathed out -- slowly, carefully, so she wouldn’t hear the sob of my exhalation -- and breathed in again. Calm air from the garden. Nasturtium, basil, lavender, marigold." Because it's like a little oasis in the middle of the desert or void of her mother's anti-affection. I really liked that touch of gentleness in the midst of the vitriol.

You and your cliffhangers lately... Keep them coming! (The chapters, not the cliffhangers.)