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| Ice That 2008-06-27 ch 1,  | abuseMakes me think, is this going to be the constant adding of more and more thoughts where Julie will get who she likes better? Sorry, I've just read a lot of love triangles... |
| Ice That 2008-06-27 ch 2, | abuseThis really gives off drama... A LOT OF IT. |
| Secret Heart01 2008-03-31 ch 2, | abuseWoah there are way more strange grammatical mistakes here than in the Ice story ... where/were, do/so, etc ... if you want I can look it over for you and point out the errors. Other than that, it's an intriguing start. Write more :) |
| eclipse-of-the-suns 2008-03-27 ch 2, | abusehey hey person good story so far i like it please update very soon can't wait to read more |
| AsYouWish 2008-03-23 ch 2, | abuseit's good! update please! |
| Valiant 2008-03-23 ch 2, anon. | abusePlease please update soon? I'm enjoying it!! :D |
| CanesFanCatty 2008-03-14 ch 2, | abuseI like that guy already, he seems very interesting. I like your style of writing, too. Can't wait to read more! |
| CanesFanCatty 2008-03-14 ch 1, | abuseI like this story already, it sounds very good! I laughed at the part about Gabby's wedding because my sister is just like her in the big wedding thing and my opinion was just like Julie's. So I can already relate to it. :D |
| give.me.roses 2008-03-11 ch 2, | abuseGreat. Can't wait to see the next bit. |
| incandescente 2008-03-09 ch 1, | abuseI think this story has an interesting beginning. :) That cliffhanger at the end of the story had me clamoring for more, but for the apparent lack of other chapters.. My only peeve was that seemed like Jake and Julie were written to be good friends before he met Gabby "Gabby and I have come along ways since junior year and my next closest friend, Jake, sort of got a break since he was dating my friend".. Personally speaking, I'd have preferred a straight in the face kinda approach in the beginning that stated that Jake and Gabby were both her close friends before they became a couple. Then the jealousy - I'm not jealous - part comes in, because its inevitable she'd feel jealous like her good friends are off for a romp without her yknw? :) Hm thats just me rambling on so yeah. Heh. Julie sounds like alot like me.. let's hope she'd find her guy as I continue to do the same! :) Continue writing this piece aye? |
| animefreakgirl 2008-02-25 ch 2, | abuse*New Reader* Wow, interesing really. Really enjoyed both chapters. I'll be looking forward to your next one. :) |
| Lost.In.A.World. 2008-02-25 ch 2, | abuseLove this story:) Jordan sounds like a jerk. Her friend reminds me of mine, she can talk about herself for hours lol. Can't wait for the next update! |
| x Tequila Moonlight x 2008-01-06 ch 1, | abusei am definately liking this alot! jordan seems like the bad boy that maybe wants to soften up a little bit. i can't wait to see what happens! |
| tayla shae 2008-01-04 ch 1, | abusei really like it so far! can't wait for the next update.. |
| Valiant 2008-01-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseI'm loving this so far! It sounds great. I hope you'll update soon and often? :P |