Do you know that in this story, you seem to be alternating between names for Brody's twin? He's both Lance and Will. Chapter 9 is when he's introduced, and he's called Will. Then in chapter 10, his name is Lance.


Other than that, I really do enjoy this story so far. =]

Great story,
but you should be careful because your french don't always make sence like "Une deux promenade d'heure" it's "Une promenade de deux heures?" If you need french sentence you could ask someone like me who's there first lauguage is french.

Ah I love the title of the plan =]
This story is super good so far.
Just a few spelling errors here and there (lol like title instead of tittle) but nothing too bad.

This was quite realistic. Well at least the end was. Sigh* I like unrealistic endings, they're so much happier though! But don't worry being realistic is good, it was a compliment, I'm rambling, I like your story, I'll shuttup now.

was'nt the brother will? why is it suddenly lance?

Your story is really good, but when you spelled the word title as tittle. And you misspelled it a couple of times. You should change it to make the story look more polished.

In the beginnig of the chapter, you write "Brody and Lance" and I thought the other brother's name is William

wow, you know, this sounds a LOT like John Tucker Must Die. You know, that film with Penn Badgley in? -drools- ;D
I can tell this must be where you got your inspiration from am I right? :P
Anyway, only just begun the story, hence the review on Chapter 2. Sounds good so far... :)

I'm liking the story so far. I like the concept. I just really want to know why Will is now named Lance lol.

I'm so glad I rediscovered this story! It's too bad about Aurora's dad though...

Great work,
E.

that was soo amazing. i officially love Aden again! i can't wait to read your new story

Aww, happily ever after. I love how it ends with them in for a lecture from Aden's parents. It makes it kinda funny and cute. That and that little bit about the strawberry ice cream.
I kinda didn't like how Trisha ended up. But I guess being heartbroken two times in a row can make someone very bitter. I guess Trisha was the one who got burned the most with the whole revenge scheme.
I am very estatic to hear that Aden and Aurora will have appearances in your other story, though. Makes me want to read it even more.

All in all, great story!! :)

nice ending. no sequel? i think its a pretty good ending though. HNY! though its a bit late.

It was amazing, as usual. SIGHS -so jealous- =P

hahah. it's soo fluffy. i can't believe that she's really that addicted to strawberry ice cream.