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| The Woggs 2008-01-04 ch 1,  | abuseSomebody alert the Law & Order squad, sounds like we've got a John Doe. That was very creepy, in a very subtle way (which is really the best kind of creepy). I like how you give us all the details of the scene (the rain, the gloves, the motions of the digging, the muddy jeans and sneakers, etc.) without giving us the details of what, exactly, it is that happened, or who this person is, or why they're burying a dead body - and I liked that you never even use the word "body". "Meat and chemicals." Makes it even creepier. Very good. |
| Casey Drake 2008-01-03 ch 1, | abuseCreepy. Burying the evidence, yes? :) CD |