Wow, I really like your writing style. Concisely held together but still shows powerful emotions. I like the straightforwardness it has towards all its actions and feelings. Great work. :) -Sara

Pstt... what's TPP?

I love the beginning metaphor of your life being a train.. that was really awesome.. I also liked how well the piece flowed.. awesome job

oh my gawsh! like wow! the imagery and the poetry and the style, and the way you ended it and the way it flowed and and just wow =) 100/10 dude! awsometastic!

you established a very vivid tone. reflects the ideas in the poem well. good job

keep writing

i really like the style this is written in. it's like watching the wheels in someones mind spinning in reverse, then forward, then in reverse, and then you're lost and you don't know where you are, but .. okay, simply put, it's great. if this is the one you were talking about, i think it would make a great prologue for a story.

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OH. MY. GOD!
I love this. It's brilliant, just brilliant.
I knew thou could do it.(which reminds me, i gotta bring u that book back today)
Now u must write the Kristina story. Muhahahaha. xD

Oh wow. That was amazing. The ending. "Gasp for air, cough death out of my lungs, clear my head -" and the entire part after was AWESOME! You could really see this inside your head too. Great job!

o__o Wow. I love it. It's a sort of new style and a lot of people think it's a risk to go against what you've always done but you took the leap and hit your mark x3 I really like it. Your descriptions are amazing as always. It captures the rushed sort of mood... pressure to get out... yeah... 8D Me gusta mucho! HAH! I put Spanish in a review. Be **. Yeah >8D

ilu xD

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