| Reviews for Try Again |
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Carlette 1/17/08 . chapter 1I thought since you read some of my stories, I'd check this out! I really don't see anything wrong with the court scene, like some have pointed out. I don't think it's too rushed. We can assume it's longer than actually stated, since we all know the process of it. Unless you revised it, but either way, I thought it was fine! :) That's so messed up! How can they find him guilty when he has no idea who this Natalie Greene is? But then, I've seen something on Court TV where this guy was sent to jail for murder and they found out he didn't even do it! So I guess they can mess something like this up too. Damn them! They need to investigate further before they decide he's guilty! I'll keep reading! |
Failure Played In Stereo 1/9/08 . chapter 3Aww! He has a date! Awesomely cute, I hope you write more :D |
gummybaby 1/7/08 . chapter 3aw, It's obvious they really like each other, I wonder how long it's going to take for them to get together... |
Parchment Quill 1/7/08 . chapter 3_Nice chapter. I was wondering when someone was going to make a move. |
Amandine 1/6/08 . chapter 2unlike others i do mind the prosecution 's rush and unbelivable.i mean,he had witnesses to prove he was home,he did a DNA test and despite all he was find guilty? how come? or maybe he really rapt this girl and you're keeping this for the end? then,he was 16,17? he was sent to a juvenile jail or a real one? there are so many things you left uncleared. plus you write in a too distant way,we didn't feel the fear, the incomprehension and the anger of accused of a crime you didn't commit and send to jail is an horrible experience,but you didn't put enough feeling there. sorry if you think i'm too harsh but it's no flame,just constructive opinion. |
Parchment Quill 1/4/08 . chapter 2I like it_ You did the whole getting sent to jail, court, etc. thing very well. I like the second chapter better than the first though, because it's so much happier_ Anyways, update soon. |
gummybaby 1/4/08 . chapter 2eh, don't worry about the innacuracy of the court system. Most people won't even notice it. I liked this chapter. Destry seems sweet, and Tyler is free! |
Failure Played In Stereo 1/4/08 . chapter 2Aha, this is getting good Destry sounds cute. I just want to hug him :D Hope you update soon |
Failure Played In Stereo 1/3/08 . chapter 10.o Shocking. Wow, this is good. Update soon please :p |
gummybaby 1/2/08 . chapter 1Interesting premise. The court scene was a little hurried and inacurate, but hey it's fiction, so it really doesn't matter. Can't wait to see what happens next! |