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| lookin4nemo 2008-01-20 ch 1,  | abusewow again...amazing...as usual! what does feign mean? I really enjoyed this one, although it was sad.. but sometimes where sad events or even depressing thoughts are...beauty is near by. That is what I love about your poems! they turn sad things in to a different kind of blue that is hard to understand but still wonderful...do you no what I mean? probably not =) not many can! ;) ~looking4nemo~ |
| Twilight Starr 2008-01-19 ch 1, | abuseGood poem. A real life situation. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Matthew James Current 2008-01-14 ch 1, | abuseHonestly, my brother in art, I must disagree with you. I feel that this piece is not one of your best. Thus far "Hollow" is the best of your poems that I have read. Rhyming does neither your mind nor your heart justice, as it seems to restrain them both. Your free form works reveal your true skill much more clearly then your rhymed works. Please, take this as a compliment, as I do not make it my business to needlessly flatter with words full of praise, but empty of understanding. You do have talent, and from what I've read you seem to have an able mind as well. This is good, nevertheless, and a pleasure to read. But for me, the greatest poem a person can write is within them being written everyday on the pages of the world. But I got too much philsopher in me for my own good, so remember to take my words with a grain of salt. It's very nice to read the work of such a promising poet. |
| MzUndrStud 2008-01-11 ch 1, | abuse..Wow... amazing poem, i love the flow of it and i can relate to it soo much. You have a great writing hand. |
| NadNad 2008-01-11 ch 1, | abuseThis is great. I don't know if it's your way of writing, though, but a few commas and fullstops here or there won't hurt. Still, you're good as you are now. |
| softer side of apples 2008-01-10 ch 1, | abuseVERY INTENSED PIECE BUT I LIKE IT... |
| killer syntax 2008-01-09 ch 1, | abusevery intense and stirring to the emotions. Well written and exciting, can't wait to look at some of your other pieces. -ks |
| losing gracie girl 2008-01-08 ch 1, | abusei really like this. it reminds me of something that happened to me and i have yet to be able to write a poem about that expresses the emotion i felt during the whole ordeal. i think u've gotten the closest yet. nice job. yours until the wind changes, Lost |
| insomniac junkie 2008-01-05 ch 1, | abusevery nice, I like it. I envy the intensity of emotion. |
| torn pieces 2008-01-05 ch 1, | abuse"I think about you day and night To you I don’t exist Why have I never shared your mind? I’m gone, void like in mist." -Nice work. ^_^ |
| savedbyHim 2008-01-04 ch 1, | abuseWow this poem is great. Great choice of words. You write very meangingful. |
| Katrina Zeffirelli 2008-01-04 ch 1, | abuse*Sniffle* Very very very good. Love it! The rhythm and rhyme both flow perfectly. Keep up the good work! |
| Kamikoko 2008-01-04 ch 1, | abuseBrilliant writing. You use a wide range of vocabulary that helps you get your point across clearly and effectively. Great work. I like your style. |
| garrulous-mime 2008-01-04 ch 1, | abuseYou captured the feeling entirely. Great job! |
| Luminous Night 2008-01-04 ch 1, | abuseNice poem. I like it. You are a poet, I can tell. I am so jealous of you, I can't write poetry, at all. Only stories. Ah, well. -Shall rule the world, Eclipse-NightRain |