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| canoo 2008-02-24 ch 1,  | abusethis poem is neat. i especially like the last line "For on that day it does your castle walls, we’ll break through" i actually had to read it twice. i thought it said, 'for on that day... your castle walls will break down' (i did the elipsis for brevity) then i read it again and i was like, hm... got me thinking. cool. |
| Anehalia 2008-01-17 ch 1, | abuseI can actually relate some of those things to my school principal. she has power and likes to use it to her own ends. It is a public school and yet she tries to outlaw things like halloween! |
| Billie.Joelle 2008-01-15 ch 1, | abuseVery nice, very honest and real. I liked it! Keep writing! |
| Rebellia 2008-01-10 ch 1, | abuseThis is an amazing poem. I really like the way you write, and how you have no psuedo-rhymes (that's my biggest failing as a poet.)The sentiment is also cool; very hopefully rebellious, and you convey it very well. My favorite line by far is "paying the plastic to feed us lies," I just read it and went "Wow." It's an awesome poem. You should be proud. |
| heartbroken922 2008-01-07 ch 1, | abusewell said and beautifully written. i loved your choice of words. great job! |
| x day x dreamer x 2008-01-06 ch 1, | abuseso well written and i love the truth in it. great word choice, too. i'd sing this anthem. ~sara |
| Captain-Dalien 2008-01-05 ch 1, | abuseThis is one anthem I'd take up and sing right along with you. It's hopeful and I love it. Very well written, too. Kudos. ~CD |
| simpleplan13 2008-01-05 ch 1, | abuseI like the message of this piece a lot and the descriptions are great... the rhyming is nice as well |
| someday-i-will 2008-01-05 ch 1, | abuseHmm. Interesting pice. It has this kind of epic sense of urgency to it. I liked it. |
| siphoned afterglow 2008-01-05 ch 1, | abusea raw sense of hope emerges in me after reading this, because I realise there is someone else like me who still cares. Thank you for writing such an amazing piece. Great work |
| Lurid Black 2008-01-03 ch 1, | abuseSweet, well written, good poem. Great job, keep writting |
| xDancingintheRainx 2008-01-03 ch 1, | abuseVery intense. I love the word choice. This piece is brutal and beautiful at the same time and it holds so much truth to it. Great work. Thanks for the review and the favorites! =) |