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Alexandra, it's my name too...
2008-07-24
ch 1, anon.
abuseTrue the name Alexandra, Alex, Alexa, Lexie, Lexa etc etc are over used but Lexi could also be short for Elizabeth. And thank you for writing this cause i think the younger writers need to know why some of their work sucks.
Alex
All The Rest
2008-07-21
ch 1,
abuseTruly...I just laughed. I also discovered that we see eye-to-eye on more than one subject. Most stories of romance are cliche, and overused. The beginning of being shaken awake has never appealed to me in general...I haven't really used it. Chatspeak annoys the heck out of my eyes; I'm not going to spend more than ten minutes trying to decipher a story.

I've become very picky of late with stories. Thanks for posting. ^-^ Keep up the good work. : )
Seoul Woman
2008-07-18
ch 1,
abuseWOW.
That was totally awesome. I totally agree with Exhibit A. By putting in a little author's note IN THE MIDDLE OF A STORY, the illusion, I guess I'd say, is totally ruined. Some people may do it to clarify, but they shouldn't NEED to clarify! They should explain what they are trying to say in the story perfectly! It makes me wonder if they've ever read a book in their poor, pathetic lives! (And it's even worse when they get all the teeny-boppers to review because then they get HUGE egos...and say they're going to try and get published! - It actually makes me laugh sometimes)
I also agree with Exhibit B. Chat speak should NEVER, EVER, be used in a story (unless they're actually online, I suppose. I actually saw a book in Barnes and Noble called ttyl. It was written entirely in chatspeak). But back to what I was saying. It's especially bad when they have a character laughing, and they actually have the character go, "HAHAHAHA!" I laughed. It's REALLY sickening these days.
I actually don't have a big problem with Exhibit C. It's just the way it's executed sometimes. On this website, it's probably horrible because a lot of people can't write (but they think they can).
I mostly agree with Exhibit D. No completely sober (and sane) guy would go and get some girl's name tattooed on his chest! Besides that's insanely weird. Although I consider myself weird, that sort of thing would just freak me out. I don't really agree with the whole it's-impossible-to-fall-in-love-with-her-in-third-grade thing though. There is a chance (in the few guys that have a drop of chivalry left in their blood) that guys could LIKE a girl as more than a friend when they first see them. I'm not saying love - that's a little out there - but LIKE could happen. I can't really explain it...a lot of my thoughts don't translate into words unfortunately.
I agree. Exhibit E is a definite no-no. Yes, I do want to know what the character is wearing. NO, I do NOT want to know what brand of clothing they use! It's completely irrelevant to the story! I understand that an author wants the readers to be able to actually visualize their character, but I do not need to know the BRAND.
Oh God, Exhibit F is nightmarish. Why in the world would the character suddenly start talking about his/herself in a long paragraph?! It's especially vulgar when it's written in the first person point of view. If the character underwent a makeover, then a complete description is totally acceptable.
Although I don't agree with Exhibit G (I actually like the name Alexandra - and I've only come across it once in a story), I totally understand what you're going through. My name is horribly common in my school, and it's been popping up in some stories lately.
Just to add in a few of my own thoughts, I'll put in some examples of horrible FictionPress writing:
Exhibit H: When authors ASK for reviews, saying "I'll update once I get 20 reviews." NO! The reviews are not for your EGO! I assumed that, on this website, you wrote because you LIKED to write. I didn't realize that most people are here to feel better about themselves. Besides, the reviews should not just be "update asap" or whatever else people write these days. WHAT HAPPENED TO CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM?!
Exhibit I: When characters do not develop AT ALL. It's like, who the hell are you?!
Exhibit J: When problems come out of nowhere because the writers on Fictionpress just like long chaptered stories so they can get more reviews (ONLY TO FEED THEIR INSATIABLE EGOS!).
I could probably go on, but this review is possibly longer than your post, so I'm going to stop now. Sorry about any errors that might make me seem like a hypocritical lunatic, heh.
Sarah's State of Grace
2008-07-16
ch 1,
abuseYou. Are. My. Hero.
*Bows to you*
FINALLY someone who can spell AND use proper grammar! I really, truly hope people will read this.
Thank you for taking the time to write this.
~Sarah's State Of Grace~
EdwardCullenDuh
2008-07-09
ch 1,
abuseOMG!! You had me going. Geez... Oops. My one story starts out with her adopted sister waking her up. I'm sorry...

goldenspork
2008-06-24
ch 1,
abuseBrilliant. :) I have to say, I agree with you on pretty much all that, except the Alexandra part. I actually don't know anyone named Alex, and I really like the name.

I definately agreed with the chat speak thing, and over using adjectives... sometimes it makes me want to beat my head against the wall.

:)
Hyperroll
2008-06-20
ch 1,
abuseNice.

I don't usually write romance fics on fictionpress and I hardly have any writing on here as it is, but I read this anyway and I can't say that I disagree with any of this.

I'm very glad this was written because some people just need to learn how to write. I mean, the idea may be great but the execution is what really matters in the end.

So thank you for writing this. I hope that people who do write clichéd stories on this site read this and pick up a thing or 10.
Robyn2250
2008-06-09
ch 1,
abuseIs there anyway we can make this a requirement for all fan fiction authors? I agree with everything you've written about. I can't tell you the number of times I have quickly hit the "back" button because an author has abused one of your rules. Those fics drive me crazy.
kitkat74
2008-06-08
ch 1,
abuseHey, I read your complaints and I agree. But what stories do you really like? Could you post them so that other people can see what stories are best? If you can that would be awsoem

thanks
Pinkamoo
2008-06-03
ch 1,
abuseI think I agree with EVERYTHING (almost) in this story :p I mean, name tattooed across them? I have that written in one of my stories, but it was because of a curse, and the character would not have put it there otherwise. Never. Ever. Because if they did that on purpose...if anyone tattooed my name across their chest I'd either laugh or go "What the hell? You idiot! Why did you do that?"

I only disagree with the Alex thing, as my name is very overused also. My name is Amy, and it is in one of your examples. I don't care when my name is used in stories, because I believe the character makes the name. I only know 2 people named Alex, so it shouldn't be restricted for any reason :p
Dreamless_Infinity
2008-05-31
ch 1, anon.
abuseDid you actually write a story based on your summary?

Because I REALLY want to read it.

Oh, and I agree about starting to read a story, then a few sentences into it press the back button.

It's happened too many times to count.

~Dreamless~
BluePillow75
2008-05-30
ch 1,
abuseYou have some really interessting opinions here, I don´t agree with them all, but most of them. I think that in "Exhibit A" you are half wright, it depends on the story. Sometimes it can be fun if the writer leavs a little note in the middle, but it depends on what the note is ofcourse. B. Here I have no disagreements at all. C. I can´t really say I agree or disagree, I havn´t read it that often, but you probebly have read more then me... D. Here you are totaly right, I think it is so annoying when it is like that! E. Yeah, I mean small descriptions are okay, but... yeah... F. Same as last one. G. Hmm... never thought of that. I apologise if my spelling and grammar annoys you, I am lazy and don´t correct them all, but hey! as long it isn´t in a story it should be okay ;)
M. Jean
2008-05-17
ch 1, anon.
abuseThroughout the course of this work I noticed exactly eight grammatical errors that I would like to point out. While reading your other work I noticed that you repeatedly make the same mistakes.

1) Though you mention your distaste of repeating the same word multiple times, I noticed that you yourself make this exact same error.

2) Inappropriate use of commas.

3) Spelling mistakes. (Examples in this piece would be capatalizing, over used [this should be one word], etc...)

4) Several typos. (For instance, writing is when you meant to write it.)

5) Poor sentence structure.

And several more.

I did find this piece very entertaining and couldn't agree more with most of your points, however, there were a few of your criticisms that I could not help but to disagree with. For example, banning the name Alex from any stories is more of an opinion than helpful advice to authors-to-be.

I look forward to any future pieces you may write.

Sincerely,
M. Jean
A Rose in December
2008-05-13
ch 1,
abuseDon't worry, you didn't waste ten minutes of my life after all.
found.eventually
2008-05-12
ch 1,
abuseHAHAHAHAHAHA. Gosh, I loved the one with the tattoo. That was classic, really. I've never actually read any stories that had the MC talking about whatever brand she/he was wearing/using as much as the example you gave, but I think I'd die laughing if I ever, ever see one.

Loved it. :)
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