that's awesome. I love how charming was evicted. and the evil faerie's a great character. I like how marisa isn't blonde - i was dreading that she would be. great dialogue and characterisation and succint, effective descriptions. How's that next chapter coming along ;) ?

Wow, I've got to say I'm hooked. The way faeries are viewed--sadistic are they? It's genious! BTW, the little commentary about Prince Charming being expelled from his kingdom... Is it suppose to mean anything symbolic perhaps? Oh, and the prologue of the story, well let me just say that's an oxymoron that I never thought I'd see.

Well I hope you update soon, because I'm definitely going to be checking up on this story.

"...casting powerful charms with barely a visible movement"

You left a fullstop at the end of the sentence.

It's really good though and please keep writing.

Hihi 'Nutt!~ (:

-stalks-

I love the way you write. Your descriptions are just gorgeous, and I especially love the way in how you describe Lady Marisa Auden. Also, the cynical tone is just awesome, as it adds to the charm of your story!~
I love the lack of spelling/grammatical errors.
I love the cliffhanger at the end.

In conclusion, I love your story.

This is the hotness!

Excellent job. I look forward to your update.

Heh heh, you've finally updated.

Glad to have been helpful with the "advice" *coughcoughcough*.

And hey, you ended it nicely. :) It's a good cliffhanger.

I like how the very last word is "murder". :)

Well, as for the sue thing...practically all those traditional fairytales have sues...snow white...sleeping beauty...you get the point.

So the prettier she is, and the worse her situation is...

The better the irony.

Yay.

You updated! Hooray!

Anyway, no mistakes there, although it is a bit short, as you said.

This is a review to tell you I've read your chapter and will probably go to gaol if you don't update soon.

Happy writing :D

Yeah, those typical stories are boring and annoying. Reality is much better because that's the way things are. Over-fantasizing our world is stupid. Maybe it's more of a paradox than irony though.

Just one thing - why do we have to wipe our feet? :P

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i love your author's comment.
man.
chandra is definitely not gonna be pleased.
xD.
nice idea.

I love the way you worded this! It's really a fresh perspective on the phrase "Faerie Tale." People always say, "Life's not a fairy tale," but maybe it is. Maybe we're just reading all the wrong words.
If you ever decide to continue with this thread, I would definitely pick it up.
;) jo

Just your style shades.of.crimson
A little short for a prologue.
Seems like the beginning of good writing.

ooh. Very clever, that. I love cynics!

'So welcome to the real world, darling, and do remember to wipe your feet'

nice touch :D

Very nice. Short, attention-catching, keep inserting good words because I ran out. And the tone is so you I can't say any more.

Anyway...Probably slightly more length about the princess thing, although I know you like short things (except for novels).

Now, having done two first chapters, please continue one of them. Or else I'll butcher you and have (insertyourname)-meat for dinner when I get back to you.

That really is rather good. But I think I may have preferred something with a bit more length. Some descriptive in that first part, explaining the princess. Good work, however.

Love the irony~~

And the abrupt, un-sorry narrator's tone.

The start to a gripping story, I can predict. ;)