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| Juniper11 2008-02-24 ch 2,  | abuseThis is the hotness! Excellent job. I look forward to your update. |
| xEmoMuffinx 2008-02-24 ch 2, | abuseHeh heh, you've finally updated. Glad to have been helpful with the "advice" *coughcoughcough*. And hey, you ended it nicely. :) It's a good cliffhanger. I like how the very last word is "murder". :) Well, as for the sue thing...practically all those traditional fairytales have sues...snow white...sleeping beauty...you get the point. So the prettier she is, and the worse her situation is... The better the irony. Yay. |
| Luny Loona 2008-02-24 ch 2, | abuseYou updated! Hooray! Anyway, no mistakes there, although it is a bit short, as you said. This is a review to tell you I've read your chapter and will probably go to gaol if you don't update soon. Happy writing :D |
| concerto49 2008-02-02 ch 1, | abuseYeah, those typical stories are boring and annoying. Reality is much better because that's the way things are. Over-fantasizing our world is stupid. Maybe it's more of a paradox than irony though. Just one thing - why do we have to wipe our feet? :P |
| Agent J 2008-01-28 ch 1, anon. | abusexD. **. i love your author's comment. man. chandra is definitely not gonna be pleased. xD. nice idea. |
| Joanna L. West 2008-01-14 ch 1, | abuseI love the way you worded this! It's really a fresh perspective on the phrase "Faerie Tale." People always say, "Life's not a fairy tale," but maybe it is. Maybe we're just reading all the wrong words. If you ever decide to continue with this thread, I would definitely pick it up. ;) jo |
| Rei.Ayanami.Laozi 2008-01-13 ch 1, | abuseJust your style shades.of.crimson A little short for a prologue. Seems like the beginning of good writing. |
| the Berserker 2008-01-10 ch 1, | abuseooh. Very clever, that. I love cynics! 'So welcome to the real world, darling, and do remember to wipe your feet' nice touch :D |
| Luny Loona 2008-01-05 ch 1, | abuseVery nice. Short, attention-catching, keep inserting good words because I ran out. And the tone is so you I can't say any more. Anyway...Probably slightly more length about the princess thing, although I know you like short things (except for novels). Now, having done two first chapters, please continue one of them. Or else I'll butcher you and have (insertyourname)-meat for dinner when I get back to you. |
| Animalistair 2008-01-04 ch 1, | abuseThat really is rather good. But I think I may have preferred something with a bit more length. Some descriptive in that first part, explaining the princess. Good work, however. |
| xEmoMuffinx 2008-01-03 ch 1, | abuseLove the irony~~ And the abrupt, un-sorry narrator's tone. The start to a gripping story, I can predict. ;) |
| Teh Grammar Fairy. =3 2008-01-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseHiya. =) I like how sarcastic and evil it is at the end. It's a good ending. Makes people want more. =D |
| Samantha Marie Haven 2008-01-03 ch 1, | abuseInteresting prologue, i really like the very last line, too ^^ I summary caught my interest, especially and i'm still very curious. I'd love to read more if you posted more! Happy writing. |
| L.A. Hoelscher 2008-01-03 ch 1, | abuseo very nice!! you sound like a professional author! i cant wait to read more!! |
| ForeignBelle 2008-01-03 ch 1, | abuseBlunt, sarcastic and reminds me of the back cover of The Series of Unfortunate Events...I'm hooked already! |