 Jesse the Storyteller 2008-08-17 . chapter 1I liked your other works better. This one seemed kind of scrambled together at the last second, not so thought out as the others. Some lines do stand out as amazing, such as "It's so goddamn hard to be brave these days" and "talking only in vowels" - both bring to mind situations and feelings... excellent job. Your word choices are fantastic.
-Jesse
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 wordsworth in a garbage can 2008-02-12 . chapter 1I really forgot how good of a poet you are. if it was possible for me to forget- just the diction, it's all fabulous. the way you poise the words. ah, damn. |
 fairytale failure 2008-01-08 . chapter 1This poem is challenging for the reader - it is unclear what is really happening, but the imagery is detailed and the emotion is obvious. I like the question that you ended with. |
 windy girl 2008-01-04 . chapter 1I like it. I'm pretty sure that I don't get it all, but it seems like you know. One of those I-know-but-I'm-not-telling kind of things. That's neat, to me.
-max |
 simpleplan13 2008-01-04 . chapter 1very powerful piece.. i really love the question at the end |
 Lurid Black 2008-01-03 . chapter 1Sweet... different from other poems... I like this.. keep writing! |