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| La Vida 2008-01-03 ch 1,  | abuseIts a neat poem. I think it is going to be difficult for some people to comprehend because of how unrealistic the situation itself is, not a lot of relations to the drop-dead-in-12-hours idea. Rhyming is pretty good, as far as how it goes as an impact poem, I think the end had something to it but the title, the summary, the entire poem was all about the girl having a small period of time to live so it wasn't anything totally riveting. Good effort anyway. |
| Lurid Black 2008-01-03 ch 1, | abuseTragic... but great choice of words to lead onto sweet rhymes... keep at it |