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La Vida
2008-01-03
ch 1,
abuseIts a neat poem. I think it is going to be difficult for some people to comprehend because of how unrealistic the situation itself is, not a lot of relations to the drop-dead-in-12-hours idea. Rhyming is pretty good, as far as how it goes as an impact poem, I think the end had something to it but the title, the summary, the entire poem was all about the girl having a small period of time to live so it wasn't anything totally riveting. Good effort anyway.
Lurid Black
2008-01-03
ch 1,
abuseTragic... but great choice of words to lead onto sweet rhymes... keep at it
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