A treasure in a trove of words. /bows/ I should have checked out the rest of your stories earlier! D:

this is awesome too!! update fast and quickly please! :D

Hi, I love this story almost as much as your other stories I've read you're a very talented writer and hey, are Bram and Andrea the same characters from My International Slip Up or is that just a coincidence, and you kinda forgot about her little mental ward in some of the later chapters and you didn't really mention them that much oh and I really like Trent he sounds like a nice match for Anna and you were really teasing us with that 'I like you' bit where Anna doesn't hear him and that was so mean to leave us hanging like that and is the evil-plot-girl Reesa or are you just choosing that moment to introduce her to confuse us or what? Bye!

Is Reesa the evil villian? You know, the one who is trying to tear apart Trent & Anna! Well I enjoyed this chapter, so update soon!
-Princess Hannah

Did I just miss it or did you not say who the girl is? The one making an evil plan. *Gasp* An EVIL PLAN! But Trent and Anna are so cute! You can't tear them apart! UPDATE SOON! Please.

-Princess in the Kingdom

Great chapter! I had forgot my password so I didn't reveiw right away. I liked it, update soon please!

*pokey*
I love it =]

A nightmare! Will you tell us what both of their nightmares are? And what about Jake? Well, I guess that will be for another chapter.

Great job, chewyy! As usual, very funny. The Roy twins are great. Onto the next chapter!

Hilarious! Inside Trent's head is so funny. Scream like a little girl who had just got the best Barbie, ever. Trent likes Anna! Trent likes Anna! Sorry about that, I'm just really weird.
Awesome chapter!

When Adi screamed Trent's name I thought Trent would be walking by at that moment! This is really cute so far!

Awe. Has Anna found someone? I must keep reading!

I like it! Wow! I took me a few seconds to find out who was who, but I figured it out! Good job!

Heya.

I felt the sentences were too long, and in a way the contents got in each other's way. Think some of them had too many clauses separated by commas.

The use of brackets (okay parenthesis) were rather interesting, though at times, it made things worse than better. Just watch out for it.

I think parts of it also need more technique in portraying the situation than simply spilling it out.

Cheers. Me.

Your first paragraph is very good for catching attention. Right away the reader wonders who "he" is, why he's late, and can identify with having to wait for someone who may or may not be in the right place. I also really like the detail in "tapping her fingers at the popcorn counter", for some reason.

The description of Andrea's headband and hair is done smoothly, using a natural movement. Very good.

"the group advice giver (you’ll learn about her later)," "advice giver" is a little awkward: howabout 'advisor' or a synonym for it? Also, the parenthesis'd phrase jolts the reader out of the story because of the second person...I think you could do without it, especially if the title "advice giver" is clearer. The reader knows that it's a group of people, so mentioning another one won't hurt (although it might be nice if, near the beginning, you specified how many people were there. At first I saw Andrea standing alone.)

"which was horrid [how about 'horribly'?] tough"

"looked at her weird." Huh? Looked at her 'wierdly'? 'Oddly'?

Your introduction of the characters is smooth, using descriptions but also actions to show their personalities. However, the first half of the story kindof gets off the subject of the missing Brian. Adding Andrea's worried thought about him to the part about the rest of the group would increase that suspense that the beginning had.

"For a second, the amused expression fades and a more sorrowful look replaces it" Random switch to present tense?

Anna is a good character; slightly odd, but identifiable because lots of people have been that "third wheel" at one point or another.

I trust that the 'one truth' will be explained in the next chapter? I'm not going to read on, but only because this isn't my genre and I'm short on time. Your writing is very good. Your sentence structure is fantastic and complex, and the characterization feels effortless. Very good work.