This is the best fable I've seen on this site, not least because it is actually a fable (instead of some of the nonsense some idiots try to stick in this category (*stands awkwardly in front of profile*). Anyway, I disagree with the previous reviewers because the point of the fable is not to go on and on for ages with mind games, car chases etc, as you clearly already know... It's a great story and not many people can write within a tradition like this (or not on fictionpress anyway.)

I agree with the other reviewer that the end came as a bit of a surprise, but not so much in a good way. I would have liked more of the story to be about the fox, or for the other animals to get punished as well. I was excited to see what the old man would do, but alas... the end felt rather rushed.

I enjoyed the tone of the story, however. Very old-fashioned, fable-like, and simple without ever being boring. You got straight to the point, and it was refreshing.

All in all, this was not a bad story at all--and if you write more fables, I'll be back to read.

Thanks!

Em ;)

P.S.--Hate to story-pimp, but I just posted a fractured fairy tale that my friend wrote. It's just a silly little story, but I would hate for her not to get any reviews by Monday, and this category doesn't seem to get a crazy number of hits, so would you mind maybe checking it out if you have the time? I know she'd appreciate it. Thanks! :)

It was an interesting story to say the least. However, the ending could have been stronger for it seemed quite anti-climactic. Also, I feel like the old man could have thought of a more creative punishment for the fox, such as perhaps playing some sort of mind game with him.

All in all, it seemed slightly underdeveloped, but it was a nice work nonetheless.