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| EmeraldsAndPearls33 2008-01-12 ch 1,  | abuseI agree with the other reviewer that the end came as a bit of a surprise, but not so much in a good way. I would have liked more of the story to be about the fox, or for the other animals to get punished as well. I was excited to see what the old man would do, but alas... the end felt rather rushed. I enjoyed the tone of the story, however. Very old-fashioned, fable-like, and simple without ever being boring. You got straight to the point, and it was refreshing. All in all, this was not a bad story at all--and if you write more fables, I'll be back to read. Thanks! Em ;) P.S.--Hate to story-pimp, but I just posted a fractured fairy tale that my friend wrote. It's just a silly little story, but I would hate for her not to get any reviews by Monday, and this category doesn't seem to get a crazy number of hits, so would you mind maybe checking it out if you have the time? I know she'd appreciate it. Thanks! :) |
| Ivory Taint 2008-01-06 ch 1, | abuseIt was an interesting story to say the least. However, the ending could have been stronger for it seemed quite anti-climactic. Also, I feel like the old man could have thought of a more creative punishment for the fox, such as perhaps playing some sort of mind game with him. All in all, it seemed slightly underdeveloped, but it was a nice work nonetheless. |