thunder-soaked skies... another favourite line. i love the way you wrote death; it just makes the word take a dead fall down the page. wonderful work, of course.

-adrian

This is beautiful! Lovely word choice and imagery. Nice job!

Rowan.

Oh wow, vivid. And extremely sad, I can't even imagine how painful this would be. Beautifully written.

I think this is one of those poems that calls for undivided attention. I had my music playing while reading this, and it just didn't work out. So I turned off my music and it all got a lot clearer. I just love the second & third stanzas. The whole poem seems wet, and I like it.

-max