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| Rimma 2008-01-05 ch 1,  | abuseInteresting images you paint here- lots for the mind to mull over. Reminds me of a Pink Floyd song, vaguely. Also, interesting choice of syntax in the chorus. I'm not sure if you meant to emphasize the words you did, but all the same it flows pretty well in most other parts. Good job. |