|Reviews for Let's Part|
| Lord Vivian Darling 6/16/10 . chapter 1
OH CHRIST THE BEST YET!
| MayaD 1/23/09 . chapter 1
okay okay okay so i've been going through your shorts, and i was totally expecting a sex change of some sort or something. IDK anyway, def. for different reasons other than that.
the guy seems annoying for his personality. he's super self involved, can't think of anyone but himself type of thing. So willing to do the drastic just to avoid confrontation. Ugh he just seems like such a SLIMEBALL.
I have no idea what you were trying to go for in terms of 'effect/impact' on this one.
| Elizabeth m.k 5/4/08 . chapter 1
wow. that's somthing different. i've never read anything like that before. if it's a true story then u should find a different way of telling her. having a sex change might mess up your life w/out her
| Written 3/8/08 . chapter 1
I love it. I was just waiting to see what crazy loop you'd throw in.
| bittersweetxxx 3/8/08 . chapter 1
omg lool, such a great short story, the end was twisted but it was damn funny, it can be even more entertaining if u continued
| ziploc 2/24/08 . chapter 1
omg the last line was like cazy i was soo not eady fo that. it took me by surprise, but it was good. alot of detail.
p.s. thanks fo the review
| simpleplan13 2/22/08 . chapter 1
the ending is completely unexpected and funny... I liked it a lot... I've been on the other hand of someone not wanting to hurt me so I can kind of relate and I also love the part about wanting to see who you are as yourself... I can relate to that too.
There were two line's I didnt like though...
She and I met in high school, a very important time in anyone’s life... it's not specific to you about how it affected you... it's just a general statement that everyone already knows.. well at least everyone who's been to high school
And the part about her being their for high school graduation and college graduation... I might just stick with college graduation... since you already mentioned high school thing
But that's just me.. it's really good short little piece and I like it a lot
PS If you're bored today check out the review game's review marathon... there's a link in my profile
| Adenil 2/18/08 . chapter 1
Oh my geez... this story is me! Minus the wife and sex change, but still...
| Aquatic-Idealist 2/7/08 . chapter 1
I find your fics in general rather interesting... But strangely cynical, as though you enjoy writing about terrible things... Just a thought, pay it no mind.
This was quite a shocker. The last line definitely widened my eyes a bit. Good job on that part.
| so i sing to the stars 2/4/08 . chapter 1
Ohgeez. That's quite an ending. xP Can't say I've heard of a case like this ever before, but I guess it could happen.
One problem: "I can’t bare to hurt others."
"I can't bear to hurt others."
I even looked it up just to make sure I'm telling you the right thing, as I've often had trouble with bear vs. bare myself in this particular situation.
Oh! That reminds me of another thing in 'Fathers and Sons': it's "It had to *have* been obvious", not "It had to *of* been obvious".
Just like in the word "could've", a contraction of could and HAVE, *not* could and OF. While it makes sense to the ears, it doesn't make sense to the...um...brain. xP You know.
| Lerene 1/10/08 . chapter 1
Oh my God! the last line.
| EstherDay 1/8/08 . chapter 1
Reading the last line I wanted to say "OH!" out loud! XD I love the way you write!
| Jesspuggy 1/6/08 . chapter 1
Wow, that was a surprise.. From the summary I thought it was going to be about a guy killing his wife.. lol. This was much better. It made me smile, and I've got the flu so not much has done that lately.