Wow. Powerful. Why dont you try a writing a happy poem? plz r/r my story and tell me what u think.

nice title. lov the feel of tis poem.
last line was the best

Good poem. Nice title.

~Twilight Starr~

Hmm.
I love this poem.
It rhymes nicely.

And the words you use are fantastic.


nota

this si so powerful i like the lin 'Tomorrow reaps inept lament' best this almost make me cry it hurts so much

wow, your really good. Nice poem!

Kristie Marie

Very nice ending, but I long to see your thoughts and feelings free of rhyme scheme. It just sounds like there is so much more to be said! You have good ideas and do original things with words, avoiding cliche. It's a shame to be trapped stylistically, trust me I used to right a lot of poems with rhymed couplets. It's a difficult thing to do well, but you still managed to communicate your thoughts and ideas clearly.

Like I've said before, experiment! Try new things and write whenever and wherever you feel called to write! Take a notepad with you and capture the emotions as they come, see what happens. The more you know about yourself, the more your poetry will echo that knowledge, and so on.

Keep doing your thing and let me know if you would like any more reviews. I'm turning in for tonight. Hope that my words were constructive, if not just let me know and I'll try to do better. :)

I love this poem, it's very well written. You have great word choice. I like the line "I’ll keep our sorrow blind." Very deep and powerful. Keep it up!

I love your vocabulary! Sorry..that was probably a weird thing to say, but I just love the words you use, because they really help get your point across. This poem was beautiful. I'll definitely be reviewing more of your work. Oh, and it's nice to see another 15-year-old Melbournian on here. =]

I really enjoyed this poem, its flow was really amazing. The ending was immensely satisfying, as you accepted whatever would happen would be just fine; which is such a difficult thing to do.

Very nicely written poem.

~the Stranger in the moonlight

Powerful. Intense. Deep.

"I'll keep your sorrow blind." Magnificent line!

~Isca

DEEPLY EXPRESSED AND VERY WELL WRITTEN I LOVE THIS PIECE..

the vast vocab really stands out here. They also depict how you're feeling very well! Quite expressive. Loved the "blithe/scythe" couplet as well, that's some sharp poetry. Keep it up, I'm very impressed =)

i love this. you're an awesome poet =)

Excellent usage of uncommon words.
Kept me glued to it the entire time.

Very nice.