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| promised rain 2008-05-14 ch 13,  | abuseI loved the story, it was so sweet and cute! Can't wait for the updates of your other stories! |
| cbprice25 2008-05-14 ch 13, | abuseI love it! That was fantastic! I'm even surprised that the chapters got so short near the end; the story probably had legs to go on a little bit longer. Great characterization. You made the scenes so alive that I've been squirming in my seat with excitement. |
| britty-tt 2008-05-03 ch 13, | abuseHaha yeh it was sappy, but it was also really cute and sweet! Which is the best way I can describe this story. It didn't have the complicativeness of most of the other stories. It was simple, short and sweet. Its a nice change. A simple love story with little drama is good to read once and while. Great job on this xx |
| SimplySweetnSour 2008-04-22 ch 13, | abusetotally sappy but that's okay. what's the difference between a suit and a tux? |
| stillgold 2008-04-21 ch 13, | abuseOh, wow! I'm a little amazed that Jordan was capable of all this sappyness, but hey. It was extraordinarily cute (sometimes puke-inducing, but only because I'm single, dammit, and resentful!) and very nice. As always, your writing is excellent. Maybe the ending was a bit too perfect, but still. Very nice. :) |
| norma 2008-04-21 ch 13, anon. | abusesappy was just was the doctor ordered! wow.i'm so glad to see the epilogue. and the reunion was a great idea. what i wanna know is when you're going ot update your other story.. forgot the name.. the magical redo one. i've been checkin that for a while now. please don't forget about it. and if you do ujust post your older version up again so we can see waht happened! |
| Gentle. Edge. 2008-04-20 ch 13, | abuseAw that was cute. But you're right, it was a bit sappy lol. Nice job tho :) |
| Gentle. Edge. 2008-04-20 ch 1, | abuseI'm kinda confused at how old they are and what grade they're in and stuff. I thought they were in high school then college then freshman year in college then senior year in college and now I'm just lost. But besides that, your story is pretty funny and I really like how it's going so far so I can't wait to read on! :) |
| Kjersti (aurora borealis) 2008-04-20 ch 13, anon. | abuseEverybody say "Aw!". :D Cute ending to a great story. I loved it. :) |
| caw122182 2008-04-20 ch 13, | abuseGreat story. I loved it. |
| Operationiva 2008-04-20 ch 13, | abuseAh...it's finally complete! I'm going to miss reviewing this story! I love your writing! Your Fan, Operationiva P.S. My fav part was when the gossipers were talking about how Jordan got engaged to a "lucky girl"! hhahahahaha... |
| Not Dead Fred 2008-04-20 ch 13, | abuseSappy? Yes. But always a good way to end things... |
| SparklingStar25 2008-04-20 ch 13, | abuseThis is amazing Love it..the whole coded messages are too cute. great job! |
| Splutter 2008-04-20 ch 13, | abusei had a couple of surprises when i opened this story to read, one being that it was completed. i'm sorry to say but your summary didn't really sell it, so i didn't have very high expectations. but oh golly, what a well written story! it was the epitome of short and sweet. and i really really liked Peyton and Jordan as characters. i thought they really suited each other. out of curiousity, what exactly was in the last note he'd given her? another plus point is that this story was realistic. she had her insecurity, and she got over it. i liked that. oh and i found the whole cryptography subject really interesting. i liked this story much more than your Morgan and Quinn one. |
| Klianie Janiko 2008-04-20 ch 13, | abuseOh that is so sweet! To be so affectionate after 2 years of dating! I wish my relationship can be like that! Cross is such a sweetheart. |