Reviews for The Death of a Murderer

Reviews For: The Death of a Murderer

doctor's diagnosis 2008-07-06 ch 1,	abuseHello from the review game! I liked the stanzas being separated, but not with a line. It seems almost to severe a break up, maybe try putting the other lines with out a double space and leaving a double space between the stanzas. Sorry if that sentance made no sense... I didn't like the beginning very much. It read too much like a story in my opinion. But really like how you said the cut left little to the imagination, an idea people usually associate with clothing. "With the seren voice / That chorused in his death" - thats a good line. It shows the finality of death and the sort of redemption, a murder talking serenely. I think it would do well to add periods. You have commas, though they are a little overplaced, and periods would help give the reader some reading guidelines. Also, not ever line needs to be capitalized, only really the first ones of a sentance, or none even! I really enjoyed this piece. Cheers, r.
simpleplan13 2008-02-28 ch 1,	abuseThe Death of an Murderer... a I think this is my favorite out of all of the things Ive read of yours... the ending was surprising and well done and the descriptions were really beautiful.. the only thing is capitalizing the first word of ever line seemed off to me, but other than that I really loved it
Tranquil Thorns 2008-01-06 ch 1,	abuseWow, how eerie! It is a misleading title - sneaky sneaky. =D I love the line '“When you took my life, You stained your own soul”. It's such a simple sentence, but it's so true of murder, and it goes very well with your poem. I really like the haunting, spooky tone. It gives me an image of winding, abandoned alleyways during the nighttime - creepy.
CatGirl- The Epic Tail 2008-01-06 ch 1,	abuseI truly love your poem. You can feel the emotions of the two in this, all the way. Keep up the good work~ ~CG

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