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funnechick 2008-08-31 ch 8,	abuseAww, man...really? She just had to go to the party and get drunk?! She's so lucky that Janet didn't see who she was. And even more lucky that she had Drew there to take care of her and drive her home. I wonder how it will go the next time she sees Joey? I really like the guy, but he did disappoint me a bit towards the end of this chapter. Oh well though...can't wait for the next chapter.
xlovexpollutionx 2008-08-30 ch 8,	abusei'm popping a review. popped! very nice, i'd already seen the first half. and no complaints really. lovely job, i like drew's character a lot. he seems like a pretty stand-up guy, and EVEN THOUGH HE'S A FOOTBALL PLAYER i don't mind him all that much. now, joey...eughh.
qtkemi 2008-08-06 ch 7,	abuseI love how every chapter you end up surprising the panties off of me (Bad visual image...I know...) I guess I should have expected how lucy reacted with the kiss...but, I have a question. When she tried deepening the kiss with steve, when he grunted, was it a damn-this-is-so-hot grunt, or a what-the-**-are-you-doing grunt?
from colour to monochrome 2008-05-27 ch 7,	abuseI only just started reading this the other day and i am LOVING it so far. I cant wait for the next chapter :)
I'll break your heart 2008-05-26 ch 7,	abuselol. loved it. I can't wait until your next chapter. :P
Petals of Paranoia 2008-05-25 ch 7,	abuseWow this is a really great story! I was pleasantly surprised. The plot seems very original, I've never read anything like it as far as the sorority thing goes. The characters on the other hand, they seem to play into the regular cliches, although I think that's intentional. I'm really looking forward to seeing more.
blackoblivion13 2008-05-25 ch 7,	abuseAH! LOOK SHE KISSED SOMEONE SHE DOESN'T KNOW! SICK!! But still entertaning. This is good. At first I didn't think I'd like it but it turned out awesome and I must now read more! So please hurry!
spunkswimmer 2008-05-25 ch 3,	abuseI love will. Thought you should know. Really awesome job!
xlovexpollutionx 2008-05-25 ch 7,	abuseSO. another excellent chapter from my excellent best friend. bravo. i especially like the description of steve. you know how to make me happy. :]] are you using the second picture on the right from the A&F photo gallery to form your mental image of drew? because i hope so. he was yum.
pixilated 2008-05-24 ch 7,	abuseI'll be blunt: the ending felt rushed. However, the last sentence was gold. It managed to tap just enough curiosity. Huh, I said this last time and I'll say it LUCY BETTER NOT END UP WITH JOEY! This chapter wasn't your best, I am not quite sure where to place it in the grand scheme of thing. Things felt all over the place and in between scenes it felt like there were gaps and pot holes that have not been filled yet. Normally you're pretty good with flow and description(one of the reason I like your style of writing), SO maybe it is just a one time thing. Best advice is that you take your time with the plot since, once you got the plot down everything else just falls into place. I'll keep reading. Remember plot is key.
ties.are.great.belts 2008-05-24 ch 5,	abusemk, update soon! ill finish this in a bit.
Mercyette 2008-05-24 ch 7,	abuseReview for the Review Game's Review Marathon! (link in lookup) Another post just in time! ^.^ Wow, you had a great chapter here. You did well when you described the scene between Joey and Lucy. I thought he was going to rape her, too, there for a minute, which, you know is always fun for the reader. I enjoy getting lost in chapters... I felt like the chapter was a bit long. You could have probably left a few things out and it still be just as effective. Just something to keep in mind for future chapters! Eagerly awaiting more!
svmgeleta 2008-05-24 ch 7,	abuseI really enjoy this story. :) PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
funnechick 2008-05-24 ch 7,	abuseWow, Lucy just keeps surprising me! At times, I do wonder about Joey's sudden friendliness, but I think he's a cool guy. Oh, and when Lucy kept going on and on about how she thought he was going to do something to her, it was so hilarious. I really like reading about them hanging out and whatnot. And I'm glad that Drew has a conscience and can actually apologize when he does something wrong. It'll be interesting to see if this project brings them closer. And finally Will and Steve...I wish she wouldn't lie to Will about what she was doing--I would think that he would understand why she's doing it if he knew the real reason. But how did Steve get so lucky as to have the chance to makeout with so many girls? And the way Kate went in there and got the job done was awesome. Good thing that Lucy sat in on a couple of ones before her turn and actually gave the guy something to loose his breath over, haha! Update soon!
superficialSagacity 2008-05-24 ch 7,	abuseWow. Impressive. I wouldn't be able to just go up to a guy and kiss him... :D

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