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| painted.music 2008-04-14 ch 1,  | abusekonnichi wa I like how you used "falling, failing, bailing" throughout the poem like a half-theme. :) It worked really well for this. I especially loved the: "falling failing bailing" in succession, and also the last three lines: "Bailing on life. Failing at life. Falling to death." Whoops, class is almost over... gotta go. I'll try to read more of your stuff later on. :) Zaijen -Shan- |
| Dandelion Cupcakes 2008-01-06 ch 1, | abusesad but beautiful at the same time... i like it very much... keep writing |
| Lurid Black 2008-01-06 ch 1, | abuseHelp me? Well anyway it was sweet, carefully chosen words, that form well thought up rhymes... keep writing. ~Lurid~ |