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| Camalot777 2008-03-15 ch 1,  | abuseWierd. Okay, so when a saw the old guy, I thought that he might be dead and be a ghost still living in the house. Then I thought that the two kids might be dead and were killed when the bus ran them over or something. Anyways, good job showing the kid's differant personalities. I like how Joe turned out to be a secret that Jim's dad's had for years. Write on! |
| killer syntax 2008-01-10 ch 1, | abuseHey that was pretty good. Very mysterious, especially at the end. I don't usually read fiction, but I did this and was not disappointed. |