oh wow
this absolutely stunning


that last line really draws someone in and away
it has an abstract quality that kind of pricks the reader and yet makes them feel at ease

cutesy poem.. by the way, thanks for adding me on your fave authors' list ;)

The movements and visuals in this really solidify the scene. I like how you've mixed abstract concepts-"infinity, nowhere", with the specific imagery in the beginning. Good write.

It gives me a clear image. Well writen, keep at it.
~Lurid~