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| Radioactive Jeans 2008-07-21 ch 4, | abuseI exactly know how Ivy feels, especially with the parent issue and the razorblades. You did very well with all four monologues, and I'm pretty sure the future ones are going to be great, too. Oh, I love the Melissa one too. Actually, I LOVE all of them! Wonderful job! |
| Of Aquitaine 2008-01-13 ch 1, | abusethis was a nice piece. You establish a very intimate and emotional connection with the reader, and the dialogue flows nicely. Not forced at all. Congrats on getting into your PA high school. I know that's exciting. |
| Sanai Hee 2008-01-10 ch 1, | abuseI thought it was a very good monolouge, it had a nice build, and was easy to imagine being acted out. I thought some bits might have been a bit redundant "I’ve never felt so dead, so not alive before." but on the other hand, when acted out by a good actress, it would be hard to notice. Maybe you even meant it intentionally. Very good work, hope to see more from you. ~ Sanai |