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| J. N. Laerasyn 2008-01-24 ch 1,  | abuseThis was very well written! It has a very bittersweet tone, and the imagery and the way you craft it is simply lovely. Almost every line is a gem in itself. However, perhaps I am just not reading it right, but I am a bit unclear as to your meaning. The imagery you use, and the connection with Wonderland to a sort of child's version of an afterlife (did I get that right?) were just beautiful (though I am more inclined to believe that Wonderland was more the dream of an older man who wanted to be a child, but I don't think that was the point here). But it seems to me that you are trying to say something more in regards to religion, which I am not completely understanding. Do you think you can clarify a little more? |
| Death Walks Alone 2008-01-13 ch 1, | abuseThe last line almost made me cry! I like this poem, though, it's sad, but it's kind of sweet too. |
| DiaRose 2008-01-08 ch 1, | abuseThis is interesting. Love, ~Dia |
| natorgasm 2008-01-07 ch 1, | abusethats amazing. |