that was amazing x
so well written

Beautiful story :) I don't come across many stories like these..but I really like the POV they're written in. You did a nice job portraying the emotions of the girl (and even the guy) to the audience. I connected with the girl and her feelings, even though I haven't been in a situation like this myself. You based the story on a true one, and really made the storyline realistic and come alive to me. Good job.

I had hope that the boy (David, was it?) would like the girl towards the end..but as it is, it was not to be. :( (she didn't need him anyway!) The way you ended your story was inspiring.."And then, after all of this, ... she will be strong again." Those are pretty powerful lines. Like the shout-out you gave to your friend. She's really lucky to have a friend like you. :) Thanks for the wonderful read and keep on writing! -mitsuke

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once again, just beautiful. I could relate with the girl's feelings and having a guy toy with me. I really loved this one, too.
I was a little confused with who was saying what, and what time period it was, but it all made sense in the end. it was actually very inviting to have you write the way you did. I'm sure what it is exactly, but it is great! :)
I hope your friend is okay now! =/ I'm glad such a talented writer could share her story though. :)

Ugh guys are gross. This reminded me of my friend and this guy who's being an idiot... but I won't go into that.
Amazing writing, though it did get a bit confusing sometimes. The emotions are shown extremely well. Excellent oneshot, therefore I must add this to my c2. (:

aw, that's so sad.

I wish she would've believed in herself more.

I like the whole story and felt like it could easily happen (as you say it did)

Now write the sequel.. HIS point of view.

I didn't like the unhappy ending, but ... saw it coming in a way, yet, held out hope it would end with his asking her out.

such a hopeless romantic.

Good job
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Great! The emotions were great.

The crumpled like a human paper bit ... fantastic

I'm confused though
He told her they should be just friends,
then it seemed like she told him?

which is it? I still don't know and I read it multiple times.

Zonne

The emotion and introduction of her parents is good. Like that.

Sad how she feels so all alone.

The beginning was a lot about school work, though it supports her kind of falling apart, it seems like it's too much too fast.

I like the building of this. The girls assumptions and her crazy twirling thoughts. I like that it doesn't share too much of his thoughts.

I think quotes around the 'typing' or conversation, or some other way to break it from the rest of the sentences would make it easier to read.

good job
zonne

I love the beginning - the part before the beginning. That is so true and sweet.

I like the story so far. I'm glad you didn't leave it a one-shot.

I feel some of it is awkward at times, the repeating words. Though, that could remain as is, because I haven't read enough to know for sure if that works or not. WHat I mean is this, they both seem awkward with themselves and each other, so the awkwardness feeds that.

on to read chap 2
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This story is so about you.
I bet it was about some guy you liked huh?
Don't worry we are all here to support you.
If you need some counselling, you are welcome to contact me on my email account.
I am part of an organisation which helps teenagers understand the concept of life.
It's a hard journey, one of imaginative proportions; but it is one we all must sojourn.
God bless.

._.

damn that was intense.
a bit too intense?
hehehe.

and HIMA, i think that someone would not appreciate that you put their name in your review. =P

Aw nice ending. :]

I liked it even though I thought it was just a little bit too soon. That's my complaint. That's it.

Lol nice story.

I really liked this chapter.

Even though at this point she liked him for no reason. >:O

Gah I miss her. ;_;

aww poor girl.

thats actually happened to me before, being asked out but then saying no.

i actually said no because i was scared, but same difference really. it does suck. i feel badly for her.
haha and then for me the guy i liked started going out with my best friend. ah that was nice. you dont even know.

just let your friend know that things will get better. she'll forget about him..

and one question - were you the one he used to like?

Jesus, talk about depressing.
This is why I'd never tell my crush that I liked him.
Good for your friend. Way to be brave. =)
I hope everything works out for her.