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| The Eternal Night 2008-05-14 ch 1,  | abuseNice leave the readers hanging, love the toddles =P, nice story quite a bit of language, but eh what the heck whatever makes it good laugh out loud. |
| BloodyAutumnKisses 2008-01-08 ch 1, | abuseWHAT THE BLOODY HELL IS WRONG WITH YOU? Isn't that what I said when I first read this? And SPELLCHECK! You should be ashamed of yourself. So, I already know that once you read this I am going to get serious crap from you, so I'm just going to keep on shooting off my fingers, here. Awfully abrupt. You need to flow better with your thoughts and not jump randomly from sentence to sentence. It's a delicate art. And YES, I did just say that. Kick my ass tomorrow. I do have to say, though, that it was a creative thought, and if you work on it *cough*CUT IT TO SHREDS AND REGLUE THE BLOODY PIECES*cough* it could be a good story. That said, keep writing! Love ya! (And please don't kill me.) |