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| doxology 2008-01-08 ch 1,  | abuseWow. Wow. This is most certainly a favorite. I mean, who thinks of this genius...and then writes it down?? Great job. Peace & Love ~> h.p. warble |
| Imaginary Strangers 2008-01-08 ch 1, | abuseI didn't really like the last part, because it was just repetition. Which may have been ok if you'd changed it around some, like adding a new verse or thought. That's just my opinion though. Other than that I really loved this. The flow was awesome, and I adored the lines, "You talk and play your mind goes boom/You work to stay but what does it prove". This was a great peom. Wonderful job. |