 .following.black.doves. 2008-01-09 . chapter 1Glow = the idea of this poem is very good and I enjoyed reading it. It is creative and unique.
Grow = perhaps, because the poem is so long, you shouldn't be so repetitive with your phrases. Also, you could have been more descriptive and poetic with your phrases.
Other than that, good work. The imagery is really good.
~sara |